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Some rant about ufopaedia texts

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Vassilios de Veritas:
So you want a simple list because it's hard for you to find things in text?

--- Quote ---The Storage facility is the base's repository for:
*ammunition
*weapons
*other equipment not currently in use
*battlefield vehicles.

--- End quote ---
???

homunculus:
lol, yeah, i might have a constant heavy hangover or alzheimer or i might be just tired, and i might have low iq, and aliens might be attacking me or just killing people somewhere else.
therefore i find lists much more clear to find info from, and they are also more routine to write.

there is such format, though, where
1. intro text is brief free-form, preferably one sentence (to get you in the mood).
2. exhaustive details as lists, usually with numerical references (you can find the detail you are looking for).
3. explanatory text can be a bit more verbose free-form (some common sense explanations and ideas).

this is the thing i was trying to do in my own version of the storage facility.

Vassilios de Veritas:
Oh, i get it.
And it sucks.
 8)

homunculus:
If Maj. LeClerc wrote like this:
--- Quote ---My mom is spending a lot of time on insignificant trifles. Like looking for scissors. I find this unfair for her that she needs to spend time and be stressed like that. I think if she had a focus point for storing her scissors, like a plastic cup or something, finding scissors would become a no-issue that she would not even notice anymore.
--- End quote ---
instead of like this (notice how the structure is exactly the same as previously posted):
--- Quote ---A plastic cup is required for my mom to store scissors in, so that the scissors are not lost regularly.
The cup would be a focus point for her to store the scissors after use.
--- End quote ---
then a good base commander would enforce the text structure by requiring that from this moment onwards, all e-mails will need to follow the previously posted 'plastic cup' example, including the bold.

And it would fit with the formal headings.

TrashMan:
Frankly, I'd make a new model for the base.


It just doesn't look like a secure storage facility. The way the base is built limits things.

I'd put shelves and lockers on the walls and in the center of the room a massive armored holding chamber OR a lift to underground storage area.

Alos, a good idea would be to add blocks that cna be used to clsoe off unused entrances. It's still for sensitive areas to have 4 entrances.

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